The panel order on this page is a liiiiittle confused...^^; I go from the top panel, all the way down to the bottom, and then start at the other side and go down. And got very, very confused till I figured out I was supposed to go from "Don't say that!!!" to the sound effect SHHHH!
There is a very simple solution to this--allow the "Don't say that!" bubble "bleed over into the panel it needs to go into. This it two-fold--it makes the reader's eyes go naturally to that next panel even if we would go in another direction normally. It also emphasizes the fact that that is what the random girls are Shushing about, and that his reaction is a little louder than he might have intended. ^_^
I can see a few ways to edit down some of the words, though, SaiRong. Sometimes, less is more. Cutting down on words for a comic is almost as important as the words chosen can be.
ooooooooooh i like that!! he's dreaming and ya and blah!! it's just like a movie it moves along so interestingly!! does that make sense? i dunno.. oh well XD
Author Comments:
pockymonster, 15 Jul 2006 09:28 am
bla bla much delayed
bla bla enjoy
User Comments:
teurastaa, 15 Jul 2006 09:40 pm
UglyKitten, 16 Jul 2006 04:53 am
There is a very simple solution to this--allow the "Don't say that!" bubble "bleed over into the panel it needs to go into. This it two-fold--it makes the reader's eyes go naturally to that next panel even if we would go in another direction normally. It also emphasizes the fact that that is what the random girls are Shushing about, and that his reaction is a little louder than he might have intended. ^_^
I can see a few ways to edit down some of the words, though, SaiRong. Sometimes, less is more. Cutting down on words for a comic is almost as important as the words chosen can be.
BTW--last panel--perfectly executed. ^_^
plain_susan, 18 Jul 2006 01:55 am
Oh, MAN, this is cool. Definately something to keep my eye on... *greedily hoards it in favorites*
flynfreako, 20 Jul 2006 05:47 pm
ThePrince, 24 Jul 2006 08:13 pm
Hanina, your artwork makes me melt <3333
You know how I get when you draw such sexy men in suits!!!
Keep feeding us the scandelous fantabulous work!
PJupiter, 02 May 2007 10:07 pm
torikins, 10 Jul 2007 04:36 am